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FanFic with all the characters stripped out.

Overall
2 out of 5 stars
Performance
4 out of 5 stars
Story
1 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 09-06-2020

This story feels like it started out as a moderately good fan fiction and then had all the settings and characters stripped out and replaced with non copy writen stand ins.

None of the characters or places are given any development in the actual story and we are just told of the greatness of the MC and the Epicness of the Magic Kingdom. This story is a collection of things happening in generic settings to cardboard cutout characters.

Beat of luck to a new author but this story really needed several more passes by an editor and onward critic to help him fill up the world and make his story come alive.

Mary Sue saves the world

Overall
2 out of 5 stars
Performance
3 out of 5 stars
Story
2 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 30-04-2020

Main Character
Good Christian girl, Queen bee of her High School, Cheerleader, Rich family, Star of the social elite.
So amazing the greatest superhero in the world falls in love with her at first sight. Note: the significantly older superhero.

Bad Guy.
Shows up 3 times, explains how important and amazing the Main Character is to the world of tomorrow then is defeated without the help of the Main Character.

Secondary Bad Guys
Mexican drug cartels, Islamic extremists, Nationalist Chinese. All working together to defeat the evils of the great America.

This book was a fun read untill you start spotting the absolute lack of depth in the plot.
Added ick factor is the narrator sounds quite young and the MC is described as waif like and young looking several times only for her to enter into a relationship with her significantly older superhero mentor.

Bodice Ripper in space.

Overall
2 out of 5 stars
Performance
4 out of 5 stars
Story
2 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 17-03-2020

For all the actions scenes it still feels like a slow plodding setup from one sweaty over muscled chest to the next sweaty over muscled chest.
The world's felt empty and uninspired, the characters where simple with only one or two generic traits each to seperate them.
The female lead was both hyper competent yet staggeringly nieve and innocent.
I'm sure this book will speak to some people but it does nothing to seperate itself from the pack for me and there are far better stories to spend time on.

A Good Story except for the workplace toxicity

Overall
1 out of 5 stars
Performance
4 out of 5 stars
Story
1 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 02-12-2019

The overall story is a fun and generally interesting Light LitRPG story with the main character taking on the role of the villain for fun, profit and spiritual healing after a traumatic life event.
Not the worst I have read of this type but not the best either. That said the story suffers from one little plot point that makes me hate the main character and a lot of what he stands for.

**Spoilers for the ending**
The main character turns a blind eye to a truely horrible case of workplace sexual abuse.
The final antagonist, an in-game moderator and real world boss, who goes by the delightful name of Maidbanger. The final villain/boss/supervisor uses his real-world power to threaten an employee and direct underling with workplace consequences if she does not sleep with him. Everyone involved from victim to the hero let's it go as something that can't be stopped.
The victim explains that her boss has already been spreading rumours and will just use the "she was asking for it defence", the hero accepts it as something that can't be stopped as it's just a boy's will be boys situation.
The company that employs the victim and abuser is described as simply being willing to fire the victim as the simplest solution to keep the company and workplace happy.
All this describes a truely toxic and horrible work place and something that the heroes should be fighting against but in the end it is simply shrugged at as part of the system and something to get in the way of the game that they are all playing. This dispite the fact that 'The Hero' of the story is infact a rich and powerful individual real world and has a direct influence on how the company is run and who is employed by it.
They have to power to easily stop this kind of abuse, I repeat easily stop it with no consequences to themselves and they don't.

I have worked in a corporate environment for years and while I know these kinds of places do exist I have worked hard to stop them when I see them. I have counseled victims and abusers on numerous occasions and even had to deal with the horrible consequences when no one stepped in and a person has taken their own life.

This story treats the abuse as a minor part of the hero's journey, something that he see's as wrong but fails to stop because the victim says it will cause more harm to her to stop it. I can only hope that future books step in to fix this but the initial reaction turned me away as a reader.

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A new narrator let it down

Overall
2 out of 5 stars
Performance
2 out of 5 stars
Story
3 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 21-10-2019

The story seems to have lost its way from the fun, interesting and inventive start to the series.
Not helped by a new narrator who tried his best but could not capture the essence of the old voices.

Great little story

Overall
4 out of 5 stars
Performance
5 out of 5 stars
Story
4 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 26-06-2019

A great little story that is well acted and we'll paced. Would love to hear a little more in this universe but a little still goes a long way.

Overall an entirely pointless exercise

Overall
1 out of 5 stars
Performance
1 out of 5 stars
Story
1 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 25-01-2019

This story is over 30 hours of pointless filler. The entire plot of this story is 'things that happen between the end of the last book and the start of the next'. Without exaggeration this entire book could have been condensed into the epilogue of the last book or the preface of the next novel.

A summery of the plot is simple, time moves on, some nations that you would expect to prosper after the war do not do so well, some nations you would expect to collapse do surprisingly well. Characters grow older, some die, and children become adults.
Thing that is going to be the centre of the next story arc happens in the last chapter. The end.

Aside from the pointless nature of the story the execution feels so forced that the novel has no flow or consistency. One thing I have noticed with Webers novels of late is he lets the plot drive the characters rather than the other way around. Several previously young and healthy characters suffer from plot related heart attacks, and they are all heart attacks, leading to the collapse of previously strong or driven factions all for the purpose of setting up the authors next plot idea, meanwhile 90 year-old's continue strong because killing them will not advance the all important plot.
Meanwhile surviving characters seem to have no actual impact on the world outside of what the plot demands, Characters invest massive amounts of money into an economy to shore up its stability if the plot says it works then it works, if the plot says it fails then it fails.
This novel contributes nothing to the overall story that could not have been imparted in 2 or 3 chapters of catch-up material in the next book, instead we need to wade through hours of flowery prose explaining how the world need to change to make the next book work.

The Audible exclusive error was on the part of the narrator, so many words are mispronounced that it took several listens to work out some names and places based on story context. And it was not just the alphabet soup of story specific names and places that he was getting wrong, several common words where used ether incorrectly of just mispronounced. The narrator consistently mispronounce Terran as Terrain, something that just kept throwing me out of the story.
A few posts from the narrator indicate he was given a pronunciation guild in the leadup to recording however that guild was filled with inaccuracies and he was specifically instructed to use the Terrain pronunciation over the correct Terran.
My best guess on the errors is David Weber is known to use dictation software to write his novels and he has taken to using some very strange pronunciations to help the recognition software deal with made-up or uncommon words. If this phonetic guild was used that might explain the garble of words through out the story.

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Missing the final chapters.

Overall
1 out of 5 stars
Performance
1 out of 5 stars
Story
1 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 17-12-2018

AUDIBLE NEEDS TO FIX THIS CORRUPTED FILE

Great story and highly recommend the book but this audible version is missing the final chapter as well as the epilogue.
If you have not read the book the audible ending is jarring but enough of a conclusion you could be forgiven for thinking it was over but it is definitely missing the ending of the final act.

AUDIBLE NEEDS TO FIX THIS CORRUPTED FILE.

Fantasy for someone who has never talked to a girl

Overall
1 out of 5 stars
Performance
4 out of 5 stars
Story
1 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 05-11-2018

Started cringing about chapter 3 but continued on hoping it would get better, it didn't.
The protagonist takes every opportunity to extol the physical virtues of the women around him, this would be bearable if it only happened during introductions but he just keeps stopping the story to explain how the women around him are better than any mans fantasy and how he just cant stop staring at them because they look so amazing. We get it the girls are all 12 out of 10.

The story makes pretentions at being a LitRPG but aside for a basic character sheet it barely shows up in the story. The Protagonist spends more time relating his situation to Builder and Crafting Sims and the importance of early game development but the world shows no indication of following video game logic so his insistence of maximising his production ques in a world where he is struggling to find fresh water just baffles. He is the leader because he has played Minecraft and this makes him the best person to direct the groups survival in a dinosaur filled jungle.

This feels like an interesting premise defeated by an author who lacks life experience and failed to make up for it with research. The world needs to work like a video game because that is all the author knows about, that and some facts from the history channel, the women are beyond beautiful because if its your fantasy then of course they are.

All in all this story could be salvaged with an extensive rewrite and a lot of research and revision but in the mean time plenty of other authors have taken the geek makes good and haram fantasy's and done more with it.

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Was expection more from all the hype

Overall
3 out of 5 stars
Performance
3 out of 5 stars
Story
3 out of 5 stars

Reviewed: 10-03-2018

Would you say that listening to this book was time well-spent? Why or why not?

A net neutral in terms of enjoyment, the passing seemed a little off and the plot and characters stretched and dragged respectively at different points.
Interested in seeing the movie if just to see how they manage to work out all the royalty's for different franchises.

Would you be willing to try another book from Ernest Cline? Why or why not?

My second book by this author and the issues seem to be the same. The main character ends up being mopey and whiney for no real reason other than they don't like the world the way it is and then needs to have a strong, superior female character hit them with the motivation bat to stop get the plot going again.

What aspect of Wil Wheaton’s performance might you have changed?

Wil works well for the characters keeping the pace going.
One thing I have noted with almost all audio books is the story goes a lot better if you bump the play speed up to 1.25 as the voices and action seem to flow a lot more naturally.